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My Country

Provide a brief description of your country. What is your country’s name? What countries are north, south, east and west of your country?


 Author: Rina

I live in Russia! Russia! One could hardly find a person in the world,who has never heard about it! Russia! Rossiya! Some people (especially foreigns) don't like it,or,maybe, can't understand us,the Russians? Yes,we are very strange people,very unpredicatable,unruled,but at heart-kinda like kids:very funny,outgoing, a bit naughty,disobedient; in general-kind,loyal,royal,loving,very devoted,exatic and risk-takers! Every time I hear it's name 'Rys', my heart starts missing a bit! I'm very proud of my country. From the bottom of my heartI thank all my fellow countrymen for everything we have done! No matter,who lives in the north or in the south,-ALL PEOPLE ARE WONDERFUL! I bet,people from the other planet are not less wonderful. Lets live in peace!

Submitted: Nov 10, 2008, 9:44 am

 

Review by:  Cuppachino

Nov 07, 2008 @ 8:56 PM 


especially foreigns ► especially foreigners

or,maybe, can't understand us ► maybe can't understand us
("or, maybe" is redundant)

I hear it's name ► I hear its name
it's = contraction of "it is" its = possessive for it

Not sure what you meant by "exatic." Perhap you meant "exactic" in which case the word you want is "precise." You might have meant: "exotic"?

my heart starts missing a bit ► my heart skips a beat
(The heart stops BEATing momentarily. Beat is the verb you want here. It's also the noun for a cycle of the beating. "Bit" means a very small portion/fragment.) a space is required after colon and comma.

Lets live in peace! ► Let's live in peace!
("let's" is a contraction of "let us")
("lets" is the third person singular present tense for the verb "let") That's my sentiment exactly. Bravo, Rina!

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